Post by Andorinha on Feb 12, 2009 10:05:54 GMT -6
OrigPoems: In the Tower
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From: Gythia
Sent: 12/22/2002 7:26 PM
In the Tower
by Erin Lale
I know you did not mean those words,
But they struck me to the core.
They close me off from you far worse
Than any locked stone door.
CHORUS:
And though I almost left you,
I can't stand to be bereft of you,
My place is at your side, dear Master.
Let me take all your burdens on my back,
Save the one you cannot give.
I will even carry you upon my pack,
Just so long as you will live.
Just say you don't think me a thief,
It was not your own thought,
Please dear or I will die of grief,
It was the gold ill-wrought.
A trick of light just made you see,
When you looked up just now,
A brutish orc instead of me,
Come to subdue and cow.
My Master, naked there you lie,
In filth and orcish crud,
As if at any moment you could die,
All streaked with your own blood.
I almost sold my soul today,
And now for your I fear,
But I won't let it lead you astray,
Our mountain goal is clear.
FINAL CHORUS:
And though I almost left you,
I can't stand to be bereft of you,
My place is at your side,
And whatever might betide,
I'll save your life and soul somehow, dear Master.
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From: AnnieLT
Sent: 1/11/2003 5:55 AM
Gythia, You have beautifully captured the soul and heart of Sam as steadfast and true. The images and mood you set here really convey the loyalty and devotion Sam bestowes on Frodo. I was deeply moved as I read "In the Tower". I join with others who have commented on your poetry and hope to see one of your poems in our monthly contest. Well done!
Annie
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From: MSN NicknameAlaere_Dûnhilien
Sent: 1/11/2003 6:55 AM
I agree with Annie, Gythia. Such a wonderful, beautiful poem. It moved me, and I could really see Sam carrying Frodo to the last part of their journey. Excellent work.
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From: Gythia
Sent: 1/11/2003 9:12 AM
Thanks everyone! Keep the comments coming and I promise I won't "get the big-head" as Sam would say!
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From: MSN NicknameIarwainBen-adar1
Sent: 1/11/2003 5:49 PM
Well Gythia.
From you Intro and your gift of the Bard I am half expecting you to be a wizard as well! Beautifully written Ode to Samwise. I hope you have something in mind for "Gollum and this months competion as well. We thinks it should have a competion my precioussss! Glorfindle has set the bar, and quite elequently high, I have to add so i look forward to yours, as well as all other verses.
Namárië ten si, tenná sinomë enomentielva Seler atar i vanya lambë
(Farewell for now, until in this place we meet again Sister of the fair tongue)
Iarwain
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From: MSN Nicknameangelsramgus49
Sent: 2/21/2003 12:16 AM
Yes it was sad..Oh poor Sam and what Frodo said !
Great poetry, I send it to some of my other Friends on a different site and they will judge it. I will use your name of course when i write it on a different site.
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From: Soleil
Sent: 2/22/2003 7:20 AM
Gythia, this is beautifully written. You've allowed a perfect vision of the heart of Sam, and shown him to be the friend we all wish we were and long to have.
Thanks for sharing,
Soleil
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From: Gythia
Sent: 12/22/2002 7:26 PM
In the Tower
by Erin Lale
I know you did not mean those words,
But they struck me to the core.
They close me off from you far worse
Than any locked stone door.
CHORUS:
And though I almost left you,
I can't stand to be bereft of you,
My place is at your side, dear Master.
Let me take all your burdens on my back,
Save the one you cannot give.
I will even carry you upon my pack,
Just so long as you will live.
Just say you don't think me a thief,
It was not your own thought,
Please dear or I will die of grief,
It was the gold ill-wrought.
A trick of light just made you see,
When you looked up just now,
A brutish orc instead of me,
Come to subdue and cow.
My Master, naked there you lie,
In filth and orcish crud,
As if at any moment you could die,
All streaked with your own blood.
I almost sold my soul today,
And now for your I fear,
But I won't let it lead you astray,
Our mountain goal is clear.
FINAL CHORUS:
And though I almost left you,
I can't stand to be bereft of you,
My place is at your side,
And whatever might betide,
I'll save your life and soul somehow, dear Master.
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Message 2 of 7 in Discussion
From: AnnieLT
Sent: 1/11/2003 5:55 AM
Gythia, You have beautifully captured the soul and heart of Sam as steadfast and true. The images and mood you set here really convey the loyalty and devotion Sam bestowes on Frodo. I was deeply moved as I read "In the Tower". I join with others who have commented on your poetry and hope to see one of your poems in our monthly contest. Well done!
Annie
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From: MSN NicknameAlaere_Dûnhilien
Sent: 1/11/2003 6:55 AM
I agree with Annie, Gythia. Such a wonderful, beautiful poem. It moved me, and I could really see Sam carrying Frodo to the last part of their journey. Excellent work.
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From: Gythia
Sent: 1/11/2003 9:12 AM
Thanks everyone! Keep the comments coming and I promise I won't "get the big-head" as Sam would say!
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From: MSN NicknameIarwainBen-adar1
Sent: 1/11/2003 5:49 PM
Well Gythia.
From you Intro and your gift of the Bard I am half expecting you to be a wizard as well! Beautifully written Ode to Samwise. I hope you have something in mind for "Gollum and this months competion as well. We thinks it should have a competion my precioussss! Glorfindle has set the bar, and quite elequently high, I have to add so i look forward to yours, as well as all other verses.
Namárië ten si, tenná sinomë enomentielva Seler atar i vanya lambë
(Farewell for now, until in this place we meet again Sister of the fair tongue)
Iarwain
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From: MSN Nicknameangelsramgus49
Sent: 2/21/2003 12:16 AM
Yes it was sad..Oh poor Sam and what Frodo said !
Great poetry, I send it to some of my other Friends on a different site and they will judge it. I will use your name of course when i write it on a different site.
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From: Soleil
Sent: 2/22/2003 7:20 AM
Gythia, this is beautifully written. You've allowed a perfect vision of the heart of Sam, and shown him to be the friend we all wish we were and long to have.
Thanks for sharing,
Soleil